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    4 days ago

    I am but a waiting weed

    Needing for the train

    Air conditioner over me

    I pretend it’s rain

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      4 days ago

      If a haiku is 5x7x5, what is 7x5x7x5?

      Super reverse haiku?

      Seriously, though. Does this count as haiku?

      Edit: Nevermind ~ it’s not a thing. But it works great. So I name it Bremku, henceforth.

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      I am but a wanting weed

      Growing with the Sun

      The train has rolled right over me

      My life has been undone

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        I am but a thriving weed

        Dulled not once, but twice

        Let them bring it back to me

        I shall sow it thrice!